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《挽救计划》的删节比较

挽救计划》里被删掉的,是回望历史时对太平天国的那段描写。

这本书对中国其实相当正面。这年头关于星际探索的题材基本上少不了中国的出现,也算是对国力和科研技术的肯定:一方面提供庞大的原始资源和人力,另一方面在载人航天、空间站和星系探索上都对文明的前进做出了自己的贡献。书里中国军方提供的航空母舰、中国航天员以及科研技术,全篇都是伟光正的存在。安迪·威尔上一本《The Martian》里,中国提供的航天设备更是以一种机械降神的形式推动了故事。

可还是免不了删节。Stratt 讲战争与饥荒的连锁,英文原文是一整段连贯推演:

"Yes. There'll be wars. Fought for the same reason most wars in ancient times were fought for: food. They'd use religion or glory or whatever as an excuse, but it was always about food. Farmlands and people to work that land. "But the fun doesn't stop there," she said. "Because once the desperate, starving countries start invading each other for food, the food production will go down. Ever heard of the Tai Ping rebellion? It was a civil war in China during the nineteenth century. Four hundred thousand soldiers died in combat. And twenty million people died from the resulting famine. The war disrupted agriculture, see? That's how massive in scale these things are."

中文版保留了首尾,中间那两句消失了:

对,会打仗,目的跟远古时代大多数战争一样:食物。他们会假借宗教、荣光或任何托词,但目的从来都是食物、农田及其耕作者。 "然而恶果还不止这些,"她说,"因为一旦陷入绝望和饥饿的国家开始为了食物互相侵占,食物生产就会减少。"

被拿掉的正是那条完整的因果链——食物匮乏、爆发战争、食物进一步减少、大面积饥荒,保守估计两千万人死亡。一声叹息,可能任何和中国有关的饥荒都不应该出现吧。

删掉之后还留下一个副作用:原文用太平天国举例,是为了给"这些事的规模有多大"一个具体数字;数字没了,那句"恶果还不止这些"就悬在半空,读者不知道它到底有多不止。这一点和 寻路中国的删节比较 里那处删完变拗口的情况是同一类。这段话本身的分量见 战争的理由从来是食物

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